J. Haux

It was Gillian’s first ever encounter with a star-gazer, the one before her was unusually female. Unusually female? What exactly do you mean by that? I don't know who Gillian ...

Ooh! OOH! I haven't finished reading. Shoot! It's too late! But you can tell how excited I am...it's really good, what I've read so far. A-ha-ha-hooray! I'm so gleeful I'm ...

Very interesting...I'll have to see more of it. :D Tsk tsk-You have some editing to do. :wink: Be especially careful of comma splices and runons. They can be tricky to ...

I'll try to come back later. I don't have a lot of time. From what I read, Silverstar seemed point out most of the important stuff. You really need to ...

I don't have time for a thorough review, just a quick note: "Thaught" is spelled T-H-O-U-G-H-T, "thought". :wink: I've noticed that it's consistently spelled wrong in each chapter. I just ...

How are you pushing your luck? I did the same thing, and no one hated me (at least, noone had the audacity to tell me lol!). People probably hated me ...

Bubble said what I was going to say. I think you could do more than "takes us over". A goblin, to me, is sly. Use more words to reflect the ...

"Too" can mean "also" or "as well". "I'll get you, my pretty, and you're little dog, too!" :wink: I'll try to look at this later when I'm more awake. :D ...

I agree with Melodie. I don't think you can compare the two. Actually, I don't think that the Inheritance trilogy has all that much depth. I was sorely disappointed in ...

Great job--after the intro, you really brought me into the story. It was beautifully written, from the heart. A few suggestions: 1. you could do more editing (I'm not doing ...

Oh my, did I not comment on this before? I read it! Um...I'm not very good with poetry. But I can recognize this: it's a circle story. The fisherman and ...

You don't happen to be a fencer, do you? :wink: Wow! This is awesome. I've been fencing for a little while, and I can identify with this. It was very ...

I don't think it was so much his description as...the fact that people were staring. I liked this, it's very interesting. I hope to read more, to see how it ...

First of all, I'm going to warn you that I'm a hard critic. I try to help though. :D Fantasy: ah...now that's my thing (I think). I think you've got ...

...I'm torn between thinking this is brilliant or ironic. I'm thinking you mean either: 1. That this poem reflects someone who is used to rushing and is trying to wind ...